Friday, September 28, 2012

Knock, knock, knocking…

If I told her once, I have told her a thousand times that he looks at her like he is seeing her for the first time and that quite honestly, this exquisite display of love leans on my last, lonely, love starved nerve. And she does get it, he adores her. So when I look around at all the cheerless masses starving for attention, I think of them walking arm in arm, him kissing each fingertip (oh, please!) and her lips curling up in a very knowing way. I must admit that I am glad that I know this about them. It gives me hope that this kind of devotion might one day knock on my door and hopefully I will be home to ask, “Damn, what took you so long?”


Five Sentence Fiction word for the week of September 28,2012: Devotion

Lillie McFerrin

11 comments:

  1. Oh, my. I've been happily married for 20 years and would love to be given such overt displays of affection. Nice work.

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  2. Wonderful, Elizabeth. Your best yet. I'm late to the party on this one.

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  3. started out like a French film! great twist at the end....

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  4. You captured a great moment in a great relationship. And an unexpected twist at the end. Nice work.

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  5. This is wonderful! It says so much, in such a simple way. Thanks!

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  6. I know this kind of love and devotion, I have it now, after fifty years of struggling thru life and three really bad marriages. God has saved the very best for last in my life, and oh how I treasure him!

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  7. I like this a lot, its the sarcastic manner combined with the appreciation and hope that really hits a nerve with me. Great stuff.

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  8. Very well put, my parent's devotion is such and I know that I'm very lucky in my own marriage!

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  9. Ah, the kind of passion that others crave. Isn't it wonderful!

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